ASSESMENT
1. What is your reaction to the text you just read?
- This was the oddest thing I have read during my entire life. It was filled with weird undertones of fetishes. It left me feeling disturbed and honestly confused as to what the hell I was reading.
The formatting and layout were fine but the overall story while interesting was just simply not my taste in writing. The creature design while descriptive in the story was still unimaginable and honestly lazily wrote, I still have no idea what I am supposed to be seeing. A worm, a snake? what?
I believe it would have been better if we could have established the creature's appearance more so than just "it had a lot of legs". That was lazy on the authors part and while we did receive some interesting descriptions, that the creature moved like water or could cage people in. It was overall still underwhelming and more of a chore to read. It all felt a bit forced like i was being made to read someones weird night fantasy? I didn't necessarily like the flow of the story either.
However, the idea behind it all was interesting even if it is just the author's weird sexual fantasies are being forced upon us to read. It was creepy, not in an enjoyable sense.
2. What connections did you make with the story? Discuss the elements of the story with which you were to connect.
- The connections that I have gathered from this story is that it is a weird twist of a coming to age story yet instead of the normal socially accepted route, the author chose to view this as a sexual maturity type of work.
The way they described everything in the story it sounds like this is still a child that we are reading about, and that is wrong. it sounds like a minor is being viewed as a sexual market, where because this kid has fat on his body he is now available to this creature. Nothing in this story led me to believe that this kid was anything more then a kid being raised and promised to some older person, in this case, a creature and then used as a male pregnancy fetish.
Sure that's probably what would happen to someone in a fantasy story and it does still happen in life today but that doesn't make it right. Simply it was disturbing to read and I despised everything about it.
3. What changes would you make to adapt this story into another medium? What medium would you use? What changes would make?
- I'd convert this story into the Horror Genre as that's where it belongs, because of how disturbing it was.
There wouldn't need to be many changes made. Just simply take the sugar coating off the story, remove the disturbing sexual undertones as they are not needed nor desired in the writing.
If you still wanted those we could easily move this into a trauma story as a minor being raised as a sex trafficker. The small children being livestock form some alien creatures. This is already in the story, it's just being beaten around the bush.
My changes would be to remove it from this genre, remove the bullshit warning that the author gave stating it isn't about slavery... it's literally describing slavery... and then move it to Horror and psychological trauma.
- This was the oddest thing I have read during my entire life. It was filled with weird undertones of fetishes. It left me feeling disturbed and honestly confused as to what the hell I was reading.
The formatting and layout were fine but the overall story while interesting was just simply not my taste in writing. The creature design while descriptive in the story was still unimaginable and honestly lazily wrote, I still have no idea what I am supposed to be seeing. A worm, a snake? what?
I believe it would have been better if we could have established the creature's appearance more so than just "it had a lot of legs". That was lazy on the authors part and while we did receive some interesting descriptions, that the creature moved like water or could cage people in. It was overall still underwhelming and more of a chore to read. It all felt a bit forced like i was being made to read someones weird night fantasy? I didn't necessarily like the flow of the story either.
However, the idea behind it all was interesting even if it is just the author's weird sexual fantasies are being forced upon us to read. It was creepy, not in an enjoyable sense.
2. What connections did you make with the story? Discuss the elements of the story with which you were to connect.
- The connections that I have gathered from this story is that it is a weird twist of a coming to age story yet instead of the normal socially accepted route, the author chose to view this as a sexual maturity type of work.
The way they described everything in the story it sounds like this is still a child that we are reading about, and that is wrong. it sounds like a minor is being viewed as a sexual market, where because this kid has fat on his body he is now available to this creature. Nothing in this story led me to believe that this kid was anything more then a kid being raised and promised to some older person, in this case, a creature and then used as a male pregnancy fetish.
Sure that's probably what would happen to someone in a fantasy story and it does still happen in life today but that doesn't make it right. Simply it was disturbing to read and I despised everything about it.
3. What changes would you make to adapt this story into another medium? What medium would you use? What changes would make?
- I'd convert this story into the Horror Genre as that's where it belongs, because of how disturbing it was.
There wouldn't need to be many changes made. Just simply take the sugar coating off the story, remove the disturbing sexual undertones as they are not needed nor desired in the writing.
If you still wanted those we could easily move this into a trauma story as a minor being raised as a sex trafficker. The small children being livestock form some alien creatures. This is already in the story, it's just being beaten around the bush.
My changes would be to remove it from this genre, remove the bullshit warning that the author gave stating it isn't about slavery... it's literally describing slavery... and then move it to Horror and psychological trauma.
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